Such home-bred glory, that they cry'd in vain, 15 21 On barren souls. Great Muse, thou know'st what prison, Ah, woe is me! that I should fondly part From my dear native land! Ah, foolish maid! 25 30 Glad was the hour, when, with thee, myriads bade (13) In the finished manuscript, in vain they cry'd. (14) The draft gives from the Island. (16) The draft reads In self surpassing summons. (17) Originally an Alexandrine, in both the manuscripts Thee to thyself and to thy hopes. O thou hast won— but altered in the second manuscript so as to correspond with the text. (19) In the draft, thus Which wanting all these latter days had dawnd... (20) The draft reads Oh Muse, not Great Muse. (31) The draft reads With for From. To one so friendless the clear freshet yields A bitter coolness; the ripe grape is sour: Yet I would have, great gods! but one short hour Endymion to heaven's airy dome Was offering up a hecatomb of vows, 35 When these words reach'd him. Whereupon he bows 40 Of underwood, and to the sound is bent, "Is no one near to help me? No fair dawn No eyelids meet (34-6) In the draft lines 34 and 36 read thus Where no friends are, the very freshet yields... Then take my life, great Gods! for one short hour... 45 50 In the finished manuscript this last line originally began with And, which is struck out and replaced by Yet. (41-2) Cancelled readings from the draft thro' ever rough entanglement (45) The draft reads hope for life; but neither manuscript affords any help to this ailing line. (48-54) In place of this passage the draft has the following: No eyelids meet To twinkle on my bosom ! false ! 'twas false Thou, Carian lord, hadst better have been tost Warm mountaineer! for canst thou only bear "O for Hermes' wand, To touch this flower into human shape! 55 60 65 70 Me now divine? Who now kneels down and dies Of all death's overwhelmings "-Stay Beware I presume it was intended to read Ah me how I am sad! A woman's sigh in the luxury of distress? (63) The draft reads fruitless for swimming. (70) According to the draft, living's crown. For the unhappy youth-Love! I have felt So faint a kindness, such a meek surrender To what my own full thoughts had made too tender, Ye deaf and senseless minutes of the day, The heavens and earth in one to such a death As doth the voice of love: there's not a breath 75 80 Upon a bough 85 He leant, wretched. He surely cannot now (72-3) The draft reads these two lines thus : After some beauteous youth-Who, who hath felt and there is a cancelled opening for line 73, As I do now. (76-7) The draft reads as follows: Sweet shadow, be distinct awhile and stay While I speak to thee-trust me it is true... (79) Cancelled reading of the manuscript, a Lover's eye instead of the eye of Love. (82) The draft reads, correspondingly with the cancelled reading of the finished manuscript in line 79, As will a lover's voice: there's not a breath... (85) The draft has the following passage at this point : Of passion from the heart-Where love is not Only is solitude-poor shadow ! what I say thou hearest not! away begone Thirst for another love: O impious, That he can even dream upon it thus !— Thought he, "Why am I not as are the dead, Since to a woe like this I have been led 90 Through the dark earth, and through the wondrous sea? And so he groan'd, as one by beauty slain. 95 100 And leave me prythee with my grief alone!" (89-91) In the finished manuscript, the note of interrogation is at the end of line 89 and a full-stop at the end of line 91. (92) The draft reads Mine own for Goddess. (94) At this point the draft shows the following variation : While the fair moon gives light, or rivers flow My adoration of thee is yet pure As infants prattling. How is this-why sure (97) In the first edition this line is— I feel my heart is cut in twain for them. And it is left so in the corrected copy. It was originally written so in the finished manuscript, where, however, the inversion of the last four words is directed in pencil, so that the right reading, that of the text, must have been lost through a series of oversights. |